Stoners, slackers, Jesus, The Grrrrail, Vampires, Dragons, Demons, Secret Cults, old witches, and more... This script has it all AND the kitchen sink. Of course, that's not always a good thing.

Title Reviewed: Grail! (REV.2)
Reviewed by: QuentinAndDoug

Fantasy Foodball wasn't a bad script and it had some funny moments. Steve's character was believable and his reason for going along with the scheme made sense. I felt some parts, like Steve Murray and Vito's night out dragged along a bit.

Title Reviewed: FANTASY FOODBALL
Reviewed by: BrunoBros

To me this play needs rethought, replotted and reworked. I couldn't distinguish between the characters. I thought the dialogue was poor.

Title Reviewed: The White Hart
Reviewed by: RyanEllisBoyd

It is extremely risky to write about our own actual experiences, as we inevitably feel stronger about the subject then our reader will. This story has fantastic subject matter, but the remarkable experience you had is personal to you, and I cannot help feeling that there is much to this that is lost as told. Of course, there are plenty of facts provided in the story, but information does not create a feel, nor evoke an impression.

Title Reviewed: Why Was Jesus Kickboxing
Reviewed by: AndyBrannan

As I was reading I quickly see the point of this story. I am frustrated with peoples ideas of sterotypes and pre determined actions and thoughts which always tick me off. Since 9/11 most people wiether they admit it or not have always looked at people and races different when at the airport.

Title Reviewed: Olive Trees in the Airport - Rev1
Reviewed by: Kevin228

My problem with your story was that it was confusing. It became hard to follow what was reality and what wasn't and in what time frame events occurred. The ending was the most confusing of all because I couldn't tell if she was having another baby or hadn't had the first one yet and had just imagined the first baby's events.

Title Reviewed: Summer Breeze
Reviewed by: Christopher Smith

I'll start by congratulating you on a great script. Probably my favorite I've read on this site. Great work.

Title Reviewed: Principles of Buoyancy
Reviewed by: Joshua Hoskins

I decided to review this story because I liked the description. I want to say it has a unique writing style which I enjoy and it is entertaining. THe structure is great and I did not notice a single mistake in all 22 pages.

Title Reviewed: The Knot
Reviewed by: Kevin228

A farcical take on good and evil: God and Satan: end times. And in the process, manages to challenge many of the beliefs so many Christians espouse. During this, parallels to other societal norms are put under a microscope.

Title Reviewed: 11-11-11
Reviewed by: brooklynct

This film was submitted in 2006 so you probably know all the things I am going to say and you probably have grown as a filmmaker. Any way, I like the back to back shots of the girl and boy in their beds and throughout the movie. The shot of the handing over the staple gun was good.

Title Reviewed: Set
Reviewed by: antican

The opening passage is very descriptive & gripping. I felt the hook, & was brought right in--nice job there. The opening sequence is very well done, & I felt transported--to the future--another nice job.

Title Reviewed: To Own the Soul and Its Swords
Reviewed by: Smokin Joe

You have some nice potential here. Particularly, the quandary Breshur finds himself in between doing what's right and doing what's right by his family. But, what you really need to do is focus the story and strengthen its structure.

Title Reviewed: OVER THE EDGE
Reviewed by: QuentinAndDoug

You have some nice potential here. Particularly, the quandary Breshur finds himself in between doing what's right and doing what's right by his family. But, what you really need to do is focus the story and strengthen its structure.

Title Reviewed: OVER THE EDGE
Reviewed by: QuentinAndDoug

I was intrigued just by your title. It's great. You have a natural knack for dialogue and there's some really fun moments between characters here.

Title Reviewed: Lowlifes
Reviewed by: Jeremy

The script is not bad and your main character Greg is believable enough in his desperate search of a family. The problem is that you're shifting from a genre (comedy) to the other (drama) and the change is not smooth enough. Changing the tone between two opposites genres is not easy so my suggestion for you is to choose one and develop the story following it.

Title Reviewed: A Helping Hand
Reviewed by: disaxster

It's interesting when you get an assignment, and you see the result so far is "pass". I gather the reviews to date haven't been kind, and I get why. Basically there are two movies fighting for control here -- you have a talk/character piece, and you got a deep dark secret film noir thing going.

Title Reviewed: Careful What You Wish For
Reviewed by: clovenhoof

It's interesting when you get an assignment, and you see the result so far is "pass". I gather the reviews to date haven't been kind, and I get why. Basically there are two movies fighting for control here -- you have a talk/character piece, and you got a deep dark secret film noir thing going.

Title Reviewed: Careful What You Wish For
Reviewed by: clovenhoof

Seems more like a travelogue than a short story. That's ok--if that's what you're after. Either way, I think the story wanders a bit (no pun intended).

Title Reviewed: Nights in the Forest
Reviewed by: Smokin Joe

I liked the bird imitation very good. But this was not a silent film because we hear background sounds. I also find this more of a improvisational exercise than a short film.

Title Reviewed: A Bird For Lunch
Reviewed by: jdzone2001

Since I just finished a children/family story of my own, my mindset is still there and I was able to stay with it while reading yours. My concerns: 1) I think your production notes said this was geared toward 10-year-olds, right? If that's the case, much of the dialog strikes me as though it would be talking down to them.

Title Reviewed: The End of the Rainbow - 2nd Draft
Reviewed by: GimmeABreak