Well, the headline says it all. I thought that this was really well done. Dark and twisted with sinister overtones that played well off the non-chalant tone of the main character.

Title Reviewed: On the Subject of My Transformation
Reviewed by: micmacmoviemaker

First Impression - format, action blocks, and length look good. While this is a promising premise, your execution doesn't make your narrative feel compelling in any way. It's like a cast of characters who go through the typical romantic comedy beats because that's what the writer wants them to do.

Title Reviewed: Twin Confusion
Reviewed by: DontStealMyScript

Please remember that this is only my opinion and nothing else. I'm not being mean with your script, I just have so many questions and questionable characters and scenes within it. Having read your script, my first impressions are that there are too many characters, too many scenes that are unnecessary, that the script is too "talky," instead of advancing the story forward.

Title Reviewed: False I.D.
Reviewed by: Me-Moi

Like you, I'm kind of on the fence about this, metaphysically or not. I liked the straight forward, matter-of-fact descriptions but the point of the whole thing was lost on me, which may very well be what the point is. Or not. I don't know.

Title Reviewed: City of the Past
Reviewed by: micmacmoviemaker

I'm pretty excited to read this, as I suffer from an invisible illness myself and I'm already relating to the synopsis. Excited to read! I'm going to start with page by page notes, and give overall thoughts at the end.

Title Reviewed: Drums in Her Ear
Reviewed by: Rachel.Was.Here

I read your script while I was on my long commute home, so these notes are different than I normally do them, in that I jotted things in the margins, and am now trying to put everything together: But, right off the top. Great stuff. That said...

Title Reviewed: Sticks And Stones
Reviewed by: happywash

Hi I like the scene when Tristan is making love and she turns to a sea creature spits out the rubber. But most of the time I had such a hard time following this story I really couldn't make much sense out of what was going on.There was way to much talk and very little show. So I was lost most of the time.It may be a language thing or maybe just me but I got lost along the way.

Title Reviewed: Port Wikkalyn
Reviewed by: stanlukas

Wow... Where do I start? So many feelings :) You have no knowledge of formatting, you have irreverent disregard for punctuation marks and you make spelling mistakes like a middle grader and you make some major structural faux pas - but you know what?

Title Reviewed: EVILoution
Reviewed by: Iritu1021

Thank your for letting me read your screenplay. The concept is a powerful immediate hook and I love the lead character’s name Angus Little. The story is extremely easy to read and flows well which is essential in any screenplay.

Title Reviewed: The Race Card
Reviewed by: HGLyman

It works. Fast. Simple at six pages.

Title Reviewed: City of the Past
Reviewed by: James Moriarty

I really enjoyed the progression of this story, looking at how the relationships have changed and the final cliff hanger moment is shocking enough and would convince you to keep watching to see what happens with all of the twisted relationships between the different pairings. The characters seem developed into their archtypes and although the twist is big it doesn't seem to out of character and gives a realistic feel to comic events. There was enough humorous breaks to make sure any tension wasn't uncomfortable and the 2 stories within the script coincided nicely as 2 parts to 1 timeline.

Title Reviewed: Brotherhood: Episode 6 Betrayel
Reviewed by: amanda78

"Knock Me Out" grabbed me from the first sentence. The entire story is written in a distinct, first-person narrative...primarily using a dialect I don't know, but because of the writer's talent,was able to "get". Leanne, the narrator, is a troubled at-risk 15 year old.

Title Reviewed: Knock Me Out
Reviewed by: karlasbryant

This story was set over a few minutes in a diner when a couple were confronted with uncomfortable events from their past and forced into a difficult decision. It unfolded in such a way that it kept you guessing as to the nature of the secrets from their past. I think it was interesting in that it took characters who were not necessarily bad and put them in a pressure situation where they were made to do bad things.

Title Reviewed: Not My Secret to Tell
Reviewed by: asankagurusinghe

Firstly I think that it would be a good start to a series as the characters are interesting and are starting to develop. The plot points are intriguing and I would want to know what happens to the characters further on in the story. I also like the subtlty of the humour, it isn't slapstick or in your face.

Title Reviewed: Brotherhood: Episode 2 The Club
Reviewed by: amanda78

There really isn't much of an issue with this one. It's intriguing, funny, and bordering on moving. That's a great opening paragraph by the way!

Title Reviewed: Yesterdays Tomorrow
Reviewed by: MaxWatt

Running notes, as in, when I see something I like, or something I think is not as good as it could be, or something striking, or something weird, or something wonderful, or something confusing, or… you get the point, which is I write as I read. Some of the things could end up being contradictory (like, I’ll think a scene doesn’t work and write that down, only to come to the next page and discover that the scene DOES work, I’ll write that down, too). But I don’t like to scrub the notes for the simple fact that you should get a reader’s first, honest reactions to your script.

Title Reviewed: Divine Intervention - revised
Reviewed by: happywash

Just a few things starting out: Personally, I have no problem with it, besides the fact that it gets slightly confusing in the beginning, but the names of your characters are hard to keep track of. Since they are so different from most American names, it's sometimes hard to remember if it was PAYTAH or ADAHY or ACARAHO, for example. Also, it works here, but I have heard multiple times, including from readers, that it is currently frowned upon to have a voice over on page one.

Title Reviewed: Rock & Water
Reviewed by: Steex

There seems to be remarkable little conflict in ‘Brotherhood’ for only the second episode ever. Most of the disagreements between Alex and Mark don’t seem gay-specific - they’re things like bickering over borrowing each other’s clothes and mocking pulling techniques. Even Mark’s potentially devastating move of outing Alex to a co-worker is resolved in a matter of lines.

Title Reviewed: Brotherhood: Episode 2 The Club
Reviewed by: dsperling

This is one of very few scripts I’ve read on here that had me cracking up. I absolutely love your humour and was laughing most of the way through. I commend you on that.

Title Reviewed: The Unsavables
Reviewed by: WStuntman

This was one of the strangest stories I've read on TS. From the crazy dialect Leanne speaks in to the ridiculously long, run on sentences, this should have been the worst thing ever – but it's not. It's absolutely breathtaking, almost bordering on genius, in fact.

Title Reviewed: Knock Me Out
Reviewed by: Revale